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    PsychoxLetter
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    Post by PsychoxLetter Sat May 21, 2011 3:25 pm

    Unfinished shiz. :D
    edit: I put it in the wrong section. =w=;;..

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    I clasp my fingers around your rough paw, and make a promise to myself. I'll remember this last moment like our first. That night I saw you, your splintered eyes peeking through the tangle of leaves and berries. You were watching me, as I was watching you, and for a few minutes our minds were wading in question, rummaging for the answer, who was in control ? Dominant, as it were. After deep thought, I realised the instant solution, slowly picking up the weapon at my side and blocking your site of my face with the inside of a gun. Your reaction was a delayed sprint away, only natural. But I felt horrible. The next day you surprisingly returned, and I laid my hand on the gun cautiously. You took a hint, backing away slightly, but all that did was lessen the size of your eyes in the bush. If anything, made them seem more piercing. You sat there while I ate, the shadow hiding all but your eyes and a small patch of fur between them. I glanced at you with an unimpressed look, before seeing your eyes widen pathetically in hope of sympathy. Pathetically, I say.. but it still convinced me to throw you a leg of chicken.

    This went on a while, our traffic light greetings in the forest. Every day I let you in a bit closer, feeding you what was there for me in return for a better look at your full body. I didn't even know what you were. One day your muzzle was here, long sharp teeth descending from the front of your mouth. I'd sworn to myself at that point you were some kind of tiger. But proven wrong, your eyes and ears showing themselves a number of hours after. Your eyes seemed even more haunting in the open, but even when shaded they were abnormally bright. Your ears, large and slightly twisted at the end, were unlike any I'd ever seen. Similar in size to a large wolf's, but far too big for the small body that seemed to drag behind the head. Though muscular and battlescarred, the second half of the creature didn't reflect very much scare. Perhaps the reason for such a stunning face.


    --writers block creation orz the ending got awful



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    Xin
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    Post by Xin Sat May 21, 2011 7:05 pm

    O.O too much writing i'll take a look latuh :P
    i'll edit this
    btw did u draw that foxy?
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    Post by PsychoxLetter Sun May 22, 2011 2:57 am

    nope I didn't draw it.
    and asdfghjkl 3.30am at night I think I posted it in the wrong section ono...
    I can't be bothered to look through my dA for other forgotten stuff right now XD
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    Post by Sold Out Tue May 31, 2011 1:38 am

    "Perhaps the reason for such a stunning face" sounds like writer's block, yus.

    All in all, the way you described everything was veeeery nicely done and veeewwy detailed. I liek'd it.

    You and your Chickensmoothie. =w=

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