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    Tears of Life

    Post by Guest on Mon Jan 17, 2011 9:17 am

    This is a Poem I wrote, I like it, but I would like the opinion of other on how it flows and sounds. Hope you enjoy it.

    Crystal tears pure as snow,
    Fall and make no echo,
    When they drop,
    They disappear,
    When we think of that soft tear.

    Happiness turns into a smile,
    Then turns into a soul of radiant life,
    With that life the soul is free.

    Travels far and wide,
    What it sees you would not believe,
    When that spark is done,
    Return is soon to come.

    To the one that made its existence known,
    The tears of life that make you smile,
    Will always exist in a tearful eye.
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    Re: Tears of Life

    Post by Fiana on Wed Jan 19, 2011 4:55 am

    Thats an interesting poem, looks like oyu have done some thoughts when you wrote it.
    I like it
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    Re: Tears of Life

    Post by Avocado lad on Wed Jan 19, 2011 6:16 am

    I would like to know the story behind this poem.... I like it, there are some things that I would have done differently but that's me, and my style of writing may not be the same as yours so that's to be expected. I do like it though.

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    Re: Tears of Life

    Post by Guest on Wed Jan 19, 2011 2:28 pm

    U seem to have a good eye on you Avocado, their is a story behind it. I wrote it as a conclusion to my relationship that fell apart from being cheated on. The relationship had last 9months, and me and this girl had dated 4 times previous with in the past 3years. she went 2 Scotland to work for the summer, and I went to see he for 2weeks while she was over their, I came home after the 2weeks and learned that she had cheated on me when we left, the one person in the world I never expected to do it to me, ripped my heart out without a care.

    I cried so much that I forgot what tears really mean, what they really stand for, so I wrote a poem on the tears of no regret.

    I wrote this to remind myself and others that when we cry, its isn't always when we r unhappy or sad that we shed a tear, but to think back on all the good things we have done and move on with a tearful eye of happiness. One that we can reflect on and do better as we grow and learn from our mistakes.
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    Re: Tears of Life

    Post by Avocado lad on Wed Jan 19, 2011 4:22 pm

    What if you cry tears of joy though? Such as if your a woman, and you find our your pregnant, and it's the happiest moment of your life? I, personally, have never cried tears of joy. But I just want to say, struggle through the bad, live for the good, and always live in the moment.

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    Re: Tears of Life

    Post by Guest on Wed Jan 19, 2011 5:00 pm

    Me Likes the Comment above. ^_^. Nice words man.

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